Tomorrow, Dr. Rachael Nichols will be guest teaching the Fam! She has asked that you complete a small homework assignment for her class tomorrow.
Check out the assignment below:
You mustn’t lie in the sun to long without sunscreen, for you will burn like a crisp. Chew with your mouth closed because no one wants to see ground up food. Clean your room as soon as the laundry begins to pile up. Remember your please and thank yous, place your napkin on your lap, and always remember to be kind to your siblings. Keep your head held high and shoulders back, because this commands attention. This is how you stay courteous. This is also how you don’t. This will help to remember manners. Just consider what you would think, if someone else ignored these rules.
Comparing “Girl” and “Manners” One of the first things that Jamaica Kincaid warns about is walking bare head in the sun, something I learned the hard way. My parents continuously told me to out sunscreen on my face, but I didn’t. I ended up with second-degree burns on my face from the blistering sun. In the imitation I tried to write close to the same style by first talking about what you should and shouldn’t do and then talking about what these rules help you do. For the first five sentences, I used commands to articulate my point while for the last four lines; I rationalized the commands by explaining how the rules would benefit the reader. My last point that I compared to the poem to was how Kincaid talks about eating without making someone’s stomach turn over. In other words, not chewing obnoxiously and noisily which is something my parents always tell my sister not to do.
Wash your hands as soon as you come in the house so that you don’t get sick; this is how you keep your heart beating. Turn off all of the lights when you leave your room; this is how we help our environment. Clean up the dishes once you are finished because we want to stay pristine; this is how we keep organized. Do not eat too much sugar, for you will soon crash; this is how you stay healthy.
Comparison
“Girl” and the poem I imitated are similar in various ways. In “Girl”, Jamaica Kincaid repeats multiple commands that someone would hear everyday in a typical home. In the second part, there are answers and reactions to the original commands, saying what the outcome would be. In the poem I imitated, I have multiple, often-heard commands, and then following with the reactions. The two poems are extremely similar in both writing style and content.
My version: Don’t do things just because others want you to, that will only negatively affect you. Don’t be afraid to try something new, that will lead to success. Don’t lose sight of your goals, that will ensure that you will never accomplish them. Don’t pout when you don’t get what you want, that will make you better at handling what you can’t control. Don’t stop appreciating what others do for you, that will ensure that you will be appreciated too. Most importantly, don’t lose sight of what’s truly important, put things into perspective, that will make you realize not to worry over the little things.
Kincaid’s vs my version: In my version, every command is set in the same pattern, besides the last sentence, however, in Kincaid’s short story, “Girl,” she has a more arbitrary way of articulating what she wants to say. I also emphasize lifelong and general skills, whereas in “Girl” the commands refer to specific actions that must or must not be completed on a day to day basis where she lives. Our styles are similar because in some of the commands in “Girl,” a result of the action is included, however not in every one. In most of “Girl,” the author lists random rules to be followed to be a proper girl and to “fit in,” however, mine is in more of an individualized style, emphasizing self- expression and self- worth.
Make your bed. Take out the trash. Take this medicine. Take this vitamin. Stop cursing. Don’t be so mean to your brother. You are so hard on him. Yes, because you don’t enforce any rules, you don’t hold him to a standard. Stop yelling. I’m sick of hearing it. Stop cursing. Stop cursing. I don’t care how much work you have. Go to bed. Go to bed. Go to bed. Stop cursing. This is how you make friends. This is how you be outgoing. Don’t spit; it’s not ladylike to spit. Since when do you care what is ladylike? You never cared before. Change the station, I hate that music. This is how to keep your cool. This is how to stay calm. You are strong, but this is how I make you feel weak.
Comparison The obvious similarities in style are the short command sentences, telling someone to do something or how to do something. Content wise, these are commands not just about chores and habits, but about actions and presentation of self. My imitation also contains responses to these commands, much like Kincaid’s original
Embrace your thoughts, don’t let them scare you; take care of yourself mentally and physically, no one likes a mess; don’t expect too much and try to protect yourself from disappointment; always bring your snack, you get cranky when you are hungry; remember that having a smile is never inappropriate and that its okay to snort when you are laughing; accept the things you can’t control and change the things you can; remain calm in times of stress, know that you can turn to the people who love you most; try not to get overwhelmed; reserve some time to be quiet and still during the day; most importantly, remember to be yourself and be the best self that you can be.
My version of “Girl”, by Jamaica Kincaid, includes similar structure and content to the original prose. Both of the poems are written in a series commands that are divided by semi-colons. In my poem, I am the person being commanded, as well as the person giving the commands. These commands, along with those in the original poem, are written in order to benefit the object of the poem. My poem represents the multitude of things I frequently remind myself to do or remember each day. Kincaid’s poem shows how someone else frequently reminds her to do these things. Another similarity between the two is that they contain some very specific orders. For example, in Kincaid’s prose, she writes, “cook pumpkin fritters in very hot sweet oil” (“Girl”, Kincaid) In my poem, I reminded myself to bring my snack with me. These two instructions are similar to each other in that they both give specific advice.
Iron your shirt, you need to look presentable. Shake people’s hands firmly and look them in the eye, it gives a good impression. Never call an adult by their first name, it’s disrespectful. And learn from the adults around you, they once were in your shoes. But also don’t forget to put yourself in other people’s shoes. Don’t assume, it makes an ass out of you and me. Work hard, put effort into everything, you will thank yourself later because things don’t happen on their own, you have to go get it yourself. Don’t be an idiot, make good decisions.
My version and Kincaid's version are similar in style, both writing with commands and sometimes following these with brief explanations. Both of these pieces relay advice, but also scrutiny. Everyone needs advice at some point, but sometimes this comes with the hard truth of criticism. Although mine contained much less harsh and generally more constructive advice than in "Girls," they do share this similarity.
Turn your Rachmaninoff down after everyone goes to sleep. Don’t worry too much; how’d you do on that test? You’d best put the book away during Latin class, even though it’s calling your name from the backpack. Don’t waltz down the halls, sing opera, or wear Walküre wings; it’s annoying. Keep your chin up; everyone has to be rejected at some point: it’s a rite of passage. Go to sleep early, but don’t slumber in your anxiety. Don’t you dare talk about death. Hike your skirt up sometimes and have a little fun, even though your idea of fun is infinitely different. Don’t cry; you are dust, and to dust you shall return.
In terms of style, Kincaid uses short, fragmented, and abrupt imperatives and indicative sentences to express ideas in no particular order. The constant slew of commands create an overbearing mood, perhaps representing the struggles of the growing youth trying to understand the responsibilities of adulthood. Punctuation is used here as a literary choice, giving some sentences continuity and others, a lack a continuity. In terms of content, this short story uses a technique in which the colloquial line speak to “commanders’” values more than it does the values of the “commandee.” This creates a picture of a life and what dialogue has shaped it in the past and helped the person grow, no matter how simple the advice or command may be. It is interesting how Kincaid describes a very detailed picture of her youth without employing the use of a single descriptive word. Thus, it is a descriptive technique alternative to that of the conventional method of descriptive sentences describing a certain object or moment.
Don't make a scene in public, you don't want people to stare at you. When greeting someone always give them a firm handshake. Make eye contact when you are having a conversation with someone. Always make yourself presentable, you never know who is going to see you. Nothing is ever too bad, never give up hope, always value yourself and your presence, you are not worthless. Treat others the way you want to be treated. Opinions are never wrong, don't curse someone out for having a different one. Respect your elders. Help out around the house. Love never ever fails.
Comparison
My imitation of "Girl" is different than Jamaica Kincaid's in terms of style because mine is more about everyday life where as Kincaid's is about the struggles she goes through while growing up and all of the things women are to do and not to do. My imitation is more about being polite and being kind. Both pieces are giving advice and establishing rules through short and choppy statements.
Get off your phone, do your homework, don't talk back. Fold your clothes, mow the lawan, don't you dare raise your voice with me young boy. Wash the dishes, make your bed, don't coplain. I want to go live with mommom and poppop, I can't take it anymore. You're so lazy. All you do is play on your phone until 11 o' clock and then start your homework. You're so selfish, you know that. I'm taking your phone away, you don't deserve it. Fine, take it I don't need it anymore. I don't need your attitude young boy. You won't understand all we do for you until you get older. You'll see what we do for you and you won't be able to thank us enough.
Comparison
My imitation of "Girl" is different the Jamaica Kincaid. The mother is tryig to teach her daughter the proper way for a girl to grow up doing stereotypically and nothing about independence. In my case, it is completely opposite. It is all about independence and to live the life that I want to live.
You mustn’t lie in the sun to long without sunscreen, for you will burn like a crisp. Chew with your mouth closed because no one wants to see ground up food. Clean your room as soon as the laundry begins to pile up. Remember your please and thank yous, place your napkin on your lap, and always remember to be kind to your siblings. Keep your head held high and shoulders back, because this commands attention. This is how you stay courteous. This is also how you don’t. This will help to remember manners. Just consider what you would think, if someone else ignored these rules.
ReplyDeleteComparing “Girl” and “Manners”
One of the first things that Jamaica Kincaid warns about is walking bare head in the sun, something I learned the hard way. My parents continuously told me to out sunscreen on my face, but I didn’t. I ended up with second-degree burns on my face from the blistering sun. In the imitation I tried to write close to the same style by first talking about what you should and shouldn’t do and then talking about what these rules help you do. For the first five sentences, I used commands to articulate my point while for the last four lines; I rationalized the commands by explaining how the rules would benefit the reader. My last point that I compared to the poem to was how Kincaid talks about eating without making someone’s stomach turn over. In other words, not chewing obnoxiously and noisily which is something my parents always tell my sister not to do.
Wash your hands as soon as you come in the house so that you don’t get sick; this is how you keep your heart beating. Turn off all of the lights when you leave your room; this is how we help our environment. Clean up the dishes once you are finished because we want to stay pristine; this is how we keep organized. Do not eat too much sugar, for you will soon crash; this is how you stay healthy.
ReplyDeleteComparison
“Girl” and the poem I imitated are similar in various ways. In “Girl”, Jamaica Kincaid repeats multiple commands that someone would hear everyday in a typical home. In the second part, there are answers and reactions to the original commands, saying what the outcome would be. In the poem I imitated, I have multiple, often-heard commands, and then following with the reactions. The two poems are extremely similar in both writing style and content.
My version:
ReplyDeleteDon’t do things just because others want you to, that will only negatively affect you. Don’t be afraid to try something new, that will lead to success. Don’t lose sight of your goals, that will ensure that you will never accomplish them. Don’t pout when you don’t get what you want, that will make you better at handling what you can’t control. Don’t stop appreciating what others do for you, that will ensure that you will be appreciated too. Most importantly, don’t lose sight of what’s truly important, put things into perspective, that will make you realize not to worry over the little things.
Kincaid’s vs my version:
In my version, every command is set in the same pattern, besides the last sentence, however, in Kincaid’s short story, “Girl,” she has a more arbitrary way of articulating what she wants to say. I also emphasize lifelong and general skills, whereas in “Girl” the commands refer to specific actions that must or must not be completed on a day to day basis where she lives. Our styles are similar because in some of the commands in “Girl,” a result of the action is included, however not in every one. In most of “Girl,” the author lists random rules to be followed to be a proper girl and to “fit in,” however, mine is in more of an individualized style, emphasizing self- expression and self- worth.
Make your bed. Take out the trash. Take this medicine. Take this vitamin. Stop cursing. Don’t be so mean to your brother. You are so hard on him. Yes, because you don’t enforce any rules, you don’t hold him to a standard. Stop yelling. I’m sick of hearing it. Stop cursing. Stop cursing. I don’t care how much work you have. Go to bed. Go to bed. Go to bed. Stop cursing. This is how you make friends. This is how you be outgoing. Don’t spit; it’s not ladylike to spit. Since when do you care what is ladylike? You never cared before. Change the station, I hate that music. This is how to keep your cool. This is how to stay calm. You are strong, but this is how I make you feel weak.
ReplyDeleteComparison
The obvious similarities in style are the short command sentences, telling someone to do something or how to do something. Content wise, these are commands not just about chores and habits, but about actions and presentation of self. My imitation also contains responses to these commands, much like Kincaid’s original
Embrace your thoughts, don’t let them scare you; take care of yourself mentally and physically, no one likes a mess; don’t expect too much and try to protect yourself from disappointment; always bring your snack, you get cranky when you are hungry; remember that having a smile is never inappropriate and that its okay to snort when you are laughing; accept the things you can’t control and change the things you can; remain calm in times of stress, know that you can turn to the people who love you most; try not to get overwhelmed; reserve some time to be quiet and still during the day; most importantly, remember to be yourself and be the best self that you can be.
ReplyDeleteMy version of “Girl”, by Jamaica Kincaid, includes similar structure and content to the original prose. Both of the poems are written in a series commands that are divided by semi-colons. In my poem, I am the person being commanded, as well as the person giving the commands. These commands, along with those in the original poem, are written in order to benefit the object of the poem. My poem represents the multitude of things I frequently remind myself to do or remember each day. Kincaid’s poem shows how someone else frequently reminds her to do these things. Another similarity between the two is that they contain some very specific orders. For example, in Kincaid’s prose, she writes, “cook pumpkin fritters in very hot sweet oil” (“Girl”, Kincaid) In my poem, I reminded myself to bring my snack with me. These two instructions are similar to each other in that they both give specific advice.
Iron your shirt, you need to look presentable. Shake people’s hands firmly and look them in the eye, it gives a good impression. Never call an adult by their first name, it’s disrespectful. And learn from the adults around you, they once were in your shoes. But also don’t forget to put yourself in other people’s shoes. Don’t assume, it makes an ass out of you and me. Work hard, put effort into everything, you will thank yourself later because things don’t happen on their own, you have to go get it yourself. Don’t be an idiot, make good decisions.
ReplyDeleteMy version and Kincaid's version are similar in style, both writing with commands and sometimes following these with brief explanations. Both of these pieces relay advice, but also scrutiny. Everyone needs advice at some point, but sometimes this comes with the hard truth of criticism. Although mine contained much less harsh and generally more constructive advice than in "Girls," they do share this similarity.
“Girl” Imitation
ReplyDeleteTurn your Rachmaninoff down after everyone goes to sleep. Don’t worry too much; how’d you do on that test? You’d best put the book away during Latin class, even though it’s calling your name from the backpack. Don’t waltz down the halls, sing opera, or wear Walküre wings; it’s annoying. Keep your chin up; everyone has to be rejected at some point: it’s a rite of passage. Go to sleep early, but don’t slumber in your anxiety. Don’t you dare talk about death. Hike your skirt up sometimes and have a little fun, even though your idea of fun is infinitely different. Don’t cry; you are dust, and to dust you shall return.
In terms of style, Kincaid uses short, fragmented, and abrupt imperatives and indicative sentences to express ideas in no particular order. The constant slew of commands create an overbearing mood, perhaps representing the struggles of the growing youth trying to understand the responsibilities of adulthood. Punctuation is used here as a literary choice, giving some sentences continuity and others, a lack a continuity. In terms of content, this short story uses a technique in which the colloquial line speak to “commanders’” values more than it does the values of the “commandee.” This creates a picture of a life and what dialogue has shaped it in the past and helped the person grow, no matter how simple the advice or command may be. It is interesting how Kincaid describes a very detailed picture of her youth without employing the use of a single descriptive word. Thus, it is a descriptive technique alternative to that of the conventional method of descriptive sentences describing a certain object or moment.
"Girl" imitation
ReplyDeleteDon't make a scene in public, you don't want people to stare at you. When greeting someone always give them a firm handshake. Make eye contact when you are having a conversation with someone. Always make yourself presentable, you never know who is going to see you. Nothing is ever too bad, never give up hope, always value yourself and your presence, you are not worthless. Treat others the way you want to be treated. Opinions are never wrong, don't curse someone out for having a different one. Respect your elders. Help out around the house. Love never ever fails.
Comparison
My imitation of "Girl" is different than Jamaica Kincaid's in terms of style because mine is more about everyday life where as Kincaid's is about the struggles she goes through while growing up and all of the things women are to do and not to do. My imitation is more about being polite and being kind. Both pieces are giving advice and establishing rules through short and choppy statements.
"Girl" Imitation
ReplyDeleteGet off your phone, do your homework, don't talk back. Fold your clothes, mow the lawan, don't you dare raise your voice with me young boy. Wash the dishes, make your bed, don't coplain. I want to go live with mommom and poppop, I can't take it anymore. You're so lazy. All you do is play on your phone until 11 o' clock and then start your homework. You're so selfish, you know that. I'm taking your phone away, you don't deserve it. Fine, take it I don't need it anymore. I don't need your attitude young boy. You won't understand all we do for you until you get older. You'll see what we do for you and you won't be able to thank us enough.
Comparison
My imitation of "Girl" is different the Jamaica Kincaid. The mother is tryig to teach her daughter the proper way for a girl to grow up doing stereotypically and nothing about independence. In my case, it is completely opposite. It is all about independence and to live the life that I want to live.