I look down and am amazed at how lucky I am. Unearthed by a wave, embedded in the sand is a perfect red and brown tiger striped nautilus shell.
I used to marvel at the random beauty of nature, at the intricacies in the veins of the leaves, at the patterns of the petals of the flowers. I used to admire the branching of the trees and the knots in the trunks.
Now, I see the ordered spirals in the flowers, the sequenced veins on the leaves. I understand the combinations and the perfect ratios that led to the formation of such beautiful things.This nautilus shell is no longer the result of billions of years of luck. It is a work of art.
I really enjoyed your vignette. The lines, "Unearthed by a wave, embedded in the sand is a perfect red and brown tiger striped nautilus shell." Was a great choice of words and I could really think of a shell.
ReplyDeleteI love how your vignette describes nature in a way that evokes a feeling. The image you create does not only affect sight but also affects emotion. Great work!
ReplyDeleteI love the imagery shown in this vignette. It makes it very easy for the reader to visualize the different aspects of nature and the emotions of the shore. Good job!!
ReplyDeleteThis is a very powerful vignette. It speaks to the uniqueness of every living individual. Although it is short, it has a very deep underlying meaning. You also used very solid visual imagery in the line "The ordered spirals in the flowers" as it really calls to mind the pattern that is in flowers. However, you also discuss how every living thing is a unique work of art, and I thought this was very creative. 8/8, a very creative vignette.
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed reading this vignette, as it shows the change of your perception of beauty and nature over time. In a very short story, you were able to display the development of your mind, discussing how you once marveled at the random beauty of nature, and how, as you matured, you were able to realize that beauty is not random, it is a work of art. This is an interesting, fresh vignette, and I loved being able to read your thoughts.
ReplyDeleteYou had a great way of describing your nautilus shell in this vignette. I liked how you talked about nature, and how nature is effected by math and how so much of nature is perfect math. I also liked how you talked about how beautiful the nautilus is and how it could be considered a work of art.
ReplyDeleteYou had a great way of describing your nautilus shell in this vignette. I liked how you talked about nature, and how nature is effected by math and how so much of nature is perfect math. I also liked how you talked about how beautiful the nautilus is and how it could be considered a work of art.
ReplyDeleteGreat job, Josh! I like how you demonstrate your childish obliviousness in the beginning of your vignette by using "used to" two times in 2 lines. Then, you describe your maturity by showing that you understand the physical features of the shell through math. Your appreciation of such a small and beautiful object is demonstrated well in the last line when you say the shell is "a work of art." Yay Josh!
ReplyDeleteI truly enjoyed reading this vignette because I felt as if I was looking down at the nautilas shell with you. I enjoyed how you said it was not nature's luck, but nature's art and also how you encorporated math into this as well. With the perfect ratios and patterns.
ReplyDeleteThis vignette really gets across your love of natural beauty, and expresses well your shift from sheer awe at the seemingly incomprehensible beauty of the natural world to a better understanding of the mathematical underpinnings of nature's structure. It's clear that, in understanding nature better, the nature of your appreciation for it changes.
ReplyDeleteJosh, I really like your vignette. Because of the great imagery you used, it was easy to imagine everything you described, and the reader was able to put themselves in your shoes. I also really liked how you compared wild, natural beauty to the order and simplicity of patterns. Good job!
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